EXERCISE N#4 LETTER David Martinez Chief of Staff EUPROFOR

EXERCISE N#4 LETTER
David Martinez
Chief of Staff
EUPROFOR
Chief of Staff
Aid for Africa (EU)
PO BOX 378
Paris
Dear Sir,
First of all I´d like to introduce myself. I´m David Martinez and I´m the responsible
for all the personnel, support and services for the European Union organization
“Aid for Africa”.
This letter is written with the intention of notify you, as soon as possible, which is
the precarious situation that we´re living here in Kampala.
We´re expecting some important problems with the contractor “Ramiro Hackett”.
As you already know, they are contracted for serving on a daily basis the meals for
all the personnel assigned to Camp Stone (Kampala). The contract agreed with the
supplier is really clear and it establishes the food quality and quantity. This terms
are broken systematically by the supplier. The food quality is really poor and the
quantity is ridiculous. Moreover, the timetable is not respected, the mess hall
opens late everyday.
This problems were detected some days ago and I tried to solve them speaking
personally with the Company Director. The justification he gave to me is that
they´re suffering a lack of staff. At least a 60% of workers left the company due to
the low wages.
In my opinion the Company was able to predict this situation. The local workers
they employ tried to negotiate their contracts but the Company refused several
times.
The situation is getting worse every day; the staff we have deployed here need an
effective Company to manage the Mess Hall. It´s mandatory to rescind the contract
with Ramiro and Hackett and to make a new contract with another company
Respectfully
Comentario
Sería conveniente que se incluyera alguna hipótesis (tarea del nivel 3), tal
como se sugería en las instrucciones. También convendría intentar usar los hechos
que se mencionan como parte de los argumentos a favor de su opinión, porque si
Comment: Omitir “the”, nunca
se pone en “to be responsible
for”.
Comment: “of informing you”
Tras preposición distinta de “to”
casi siempre va gerundio.
Comment: “about the
precarious…”
Comment: “We are afraid we
will have some…” = Nos
tememos que tendremos….
Comment: “they are hired”
Comment: “to serve the meals
for all the personnel …. on a daily
basis”
Comment: “and its quantity”
Comment: “These terms have
been systematically broken…”
Comment: “These problems”,
“these” plural, “this” singular.
Comment: Omitir “to”.
Comment: “of the workers”,
con “the” porque introduce un
concepto determinado.
Comment: “needs”,
normalmente “staff” se trata
como un singular.
simplemente se narran hechos pasados se está realizando una tarea del nivel 2,
mientras que si se defiende la opinión propia se está trabajando en un nivel 3.
En los textos formales se evitan las contracciones en general, aunque
algunas más que otras. Por ejemplo, “we’re” es una que rara vez se usa en un texto
formal.
Por lo demás el texto es claro y el mensaje llega sin problemas al lector.